In critiquing my own work, I think I do need to work on that. Once I write something I never feel like I need to change it. One trick that I do have is to read my essay out loud so that I can point out any grammatical errors. In editing my partner’s essays I offered advice about connecting their thesis better with their evidence. I feel that I should have offered better structural techniques rather than gramatical. Majority of my comments were complements supporting the writer rather than critiques. I think that I definitely need to obtain some work in this area.

“I think fixing up your thesis so that it doesn’t only talk about Safe Space Radio would be beneficial. I also think you should try to incorporate social cohesion in your analysis, almost lost sight as to what the essay’s goal was. Some sentences could be worded better so that you get your point across better. Also I would double check your MLA format in the quotes”

This was the feedback of the most recent essay that we wrote. I feel that this feedback was much more beneficial than any feedback would have been in the beginning of the year. I think this because I had talked about analysis and MLA format.  

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1KLyZizctX-MAjmuWJGsfo_VsyAe23JB5OFxehOCORw0/edit

 

I feel that I have definitely gotten better at critiquing the works of others. Especially with these podcasts, I feel that peer evaluations were especially important because it was easy for others not to understand your writing because they were personal stories. A piece of advice I had for Brenna was:

Great work Brenna! This story is very moving. I do not feel you even need that much editing. Try reading it outloud to just fix awkward sentence structure. You imagery is awesome. I really felt like I was roaming the halls of middle school again. I feel you could definitely relate this back to Anne Hallward to make a strong text to self connection. Overall great work and I’m glad you overcame all of that negativity. You are awesome.

 

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1LmiZfYXg0rBgm0rBmnxTvSaS9VDfzZ-HP9k3BWOk2WA/edit